The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared.
Reasons for study
Interest in subject 40%
To gain qualifications 38%
Help for current job 22%
To improve prospects of promotion 20%
Enjoy learning studying 20%
To be able to change jobs 12%
To meet people 9%
How the costs of each course should be shared
Taxpayer 25%
Employer35%
Individual40%
There are two charts below. The first one is a bar chart, which illustrates that the reasons why the adults decide to study. The second one is a pie chart, which reveals the percentage of the educational costs shared by taxpayer, employer and individual. Clearly, the individual afforded the largest portion expenditure in the three groups.
As can be seen from the first chart, the highest percentage of adult, which stood at 40 percent, determined to study in the purpose of interest in subject. Moreover, the number of adults in pursuit of qualifications was only 2 percent less than that in interest, representing 38 percent of adults.
In addition, there were three groups of adults whose study motivations were affected by different career factors in the survey. For example, 22 percent of adults studied for their current jobs, which is the relatively highest part among the groups, compared with 12 percent of people studying for the preparation of changing works in the future and 20 percent for promotion. However, there was still the slightest percentage of adults surveyed studying for meeting people.
The second graph unfolds that 40 percent of educational expenses was shared by the adults themselves. The remainders were divided by employer and taxpayer, into 35% and 25% respectively.
In conclusion, there are a variety of motives for the study of adults and people think the costs of adult education should be afforded by the individual and society, with the individual having the lion’s share.
There are two charts below. The first one is a bar chart, illustrating the reasons for adults deciding to study. (由于文章的字数远远超出考试要求，建议每句话的表达力求简洁.) , while the second, a pie chart, revealing the expected percentage of the educational costs shared by taxpayer, employer and individual. (一定要注意表达，其实题目明确说明The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared . 因此这只是一个预期的状态, 所以expected一定要加上去。) Clearly, the individual afforded the largest portion expenditure in the three groups. (这句话明显就是错误的了，因为这个事实是没有发生的，只是一个预想的情况。而且这种概括性的话，没有必要写在开头，开头只要写明图表所要表示的内容，就可以了。)
As can be seen from the first chart, the highest percentage of adult, which stand at 40 percent, determined to study in the purpose of interest in subject. Moreover, the number of adults in pursuit of qualifications is only 2 percent less than that in interest, representing 38 percent of adults. (由于题目里面并没有写明具体的时间，所以时态最好用一般现在时.)
In addition, there are three groups of adults whose study motivations are affected by different career factors in the survey. For example, 22 percent of adults studied for their current jobs, which is the relatively highest part among the groups, compared with 12 percent of people studying for the preparation of changing works in the future and 20 percent for promotion. However, there was still the slightest percentage of adults surveyed studying for meeting people.
The second graph unfolds that 40 percent of educational expenses is supposed to be shared by the adults themselves. The remainders, according to the people in survey, should be divided by employer and taxpayer, into 35% and 25% respectively.
In conclusion, there are a variety of motives for the study of adults and people think the costs of adult education should be afforded by the individual and society, with the individual responsible for the lion’s share.
文章的语言流畅自然，内容具体，很全面的描述了图表的情况。但最大的问题在于对于饼图的描述中，误解了图表所示的内容. 图表的意思是人们认为教育费用应该由谁承担，而作者却理解为人们承担教育经费的比例，这其实是两个概念，在小作文里面经常会混起来的，一定要注意避免类似的错误。批改后的文章至少可以得到7分.
本篇文章为环球学员赵亚男原创, 亚男同学经过勤奋的练习和写作中心的作文修改，能写出如此好的文章，真是可喜可贺.同时也感谢亚男同学愿意将自己的佳作与大家一起分享。
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