Patrick写的7/16A类范文
这道题重点在于两方面都要讨论:workers和employers。当然是对两种人都有好处，主要从省钱，提高工作效率，增加和家人在一起的时间，就业和招聘变得容易几方面讲。（永远不要写什么让步段，鼓励人写让步段的一定是自己没有亲自参加过雅思考试的人。因为a 考生考完听力和阅读和写作task1之后根本没有剩余的脑力去组织好“让步“；b 英语水平低于大学英语专业教师水平的考生一定无法把让步段和上下文衔接自然；c 要拿高分根本没有必要非“让步“不可。事实上我看了一些雅思写作教师“范文"的让步段，都写得不够成功，让步段是很多作文里明显的画蛇添足部分）。主旨句和主题句不要忘了 ：）
7/16 essay question
Many people work at home using modern technology today.Some people think only workers benefit from it,not the employers.To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Progressions in telecommunications technology have enabled the practice of telecommuting,which means workers can conduct their assigned tasks without having to commute back and forth to work regularly.This emerging working pattern has profound implications on our work and life.Some assert thatonly workers,not the employers,can be beneficiaries of telecommuting.Personally,I cannot go along with their view.
Granted,telecommuting can bestow numerous benefits upon the employees.To begin with,employees do not have to live with the constant fear that their boss may look over their shoulders,as their work is supervised from far away and in more laissez faire fashions.There is no need for them to get super well-groomed and they can "slack off" a bit when the work-induced stress is too intense to bear.They can even do aerobics or take showers to refresh themselves provided they can meet the deadline set by their bosses.Furthermore,telecommuting can spare workers the everyday chore of traveling back and forth to work.And this,in turn,helps them to cut down on costs of bus fare,fuel or extravagant work clothes.Lastly,telecommuters can dedicate far more time to their spouse and offspring than office-bound workers.This can,doubtless,strengthen their family ties or may even salvage dysfunctional households.
Yet it would be erroneous if we fail to ackowledge the advantages telecommuting can confer on the employers.In the first place,less constraints,less peer pressure at work,no office politics and more flexible schedules can boost employee morale and enhance productivity.Empirical evidence abounds in this respect that more occupational freedom can,more often than not,lead to stronger vocational motivation and more innovative ideas.Hence,employers may well be better off not keeping tabs on their workers nine to five every weekday.In the second place telecommuting work force can help business-owners substantially curtail the overhead costs,such as the costs of rent and utilities.Thirdly,the fact that workers can telecommute via the worldwide communications network allows employers to recruit people from remote locations or even half way around the globe,thereby markedly augmenting the labor pool of businesses.Last but not least,employers will not be plagued by petty concerns such as absenteeism and excessive sick leaves anymore if workers telecommute.
To conclude,I concede that telecommuting can bring about a variety of boons to employees.However,it would be unjustifiable if we overlooked the advantages telecommuting can spawn on the employers' side.And we should strive to seek out the most effective approach to exploit this win-win situation.